I received positive feedback about the information that I gave in my pitch. The only things that were pointed out about my delivery was that the video was a little choppy between segments so I tried to do this one in a full take. I changed these aspects and tried to focus more on the outcome on the feelings of people who are watching this pitch. I thought all the constructive criticism was valid and therefore included it into my new pitch.
Hi Sophia, thank you for sharing! I think you did a really good job taking the feedback you got and using it to improve this pitch. I can definitely tell that the video is less choppy so the delivery of the pitch is smoother and clearer. You were clear and enthusiastic and you were able to connect well with your audience. Great job on the pitch!
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ReplyDeletethis was a really good pitch, your delivery was well paced and you spoke clearly. The points you made were very persuasive and caught my attention. You did a great job at taking the feedback you received and improving your pitch. Thanks for sharing!
Hi Sophia,
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job of improving your pitch based on your feedback you received. You spoke slowly and clearly and your pitch itself was easy to follow and very explanatory. Great work!
Hey Sophia,
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a really great job of taking everyone's feedback from your previous two elevator pitches ans applying here. You seem very professional and composed when you present. I think your ideas are engaging and exciting. Everything you day makes me want to listen and just learn more about what you are selling to us. Overall, great job and thanks for sharing with us.
-Morgan Mowery